It's late. The rest of the house has been asleep for hours. A few precious moments to herself. These days, those moments are few and far between. She finds peace in the quiet of the house.
In sharp contrast to the stillness indoors, outside leaves rustle on the trees. The wind batters the shutters against the house. Thunder booms off in the distance as the storm brews.
She sits curled up on the couch. The only light in the room comes from the moon and a single flickering taper. Lost in thought, she analyzes each word he'd spoken for hidden meaning, searching for the secret subtext that had to be there.
Never before had she met someone like him. From the moment they met, he had a way of invading her thoughts, her dreams, her heart. Though she hadn't known anything was missing from her life, when she was with him, she was complete.
He would be dangerous. Exciting. And oh so amazing.
As she drifted to sleep, carried away by the rhythm of the night, her last conscious thought was how she couldn't wait to see him again.
For more Theme Thursday rhythm, click here. Was this part of the Vampire Series? I don't know... You be the judge.
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18 comments:
Yummm! That leaves me with fantabulous thoughts to fall asleep with! Hope you're having a great week!
She is gonna get it soon! I can feel it! Your writing style is superb!
and yes this has vampire written all over it!
yes indeed...you are relishing the tease of this moment leaving us wanting more...
Big tease! He'd better arrive next week or else!
I'd demand an HIV test...
sorry ive missed comments lately, I've been a bad boy.
I agree with otin, it's definitely vampire! LOVE IT, cant wait!
Yes! This makes a great prelude to another chapter :)
Word verify=insfear hmmmm...
That was some teaser! What next?!?!
xoxo
I'm trying to find time to read and critique...I would edit more. e.g. delete last sentence in first paragraph "She finds peace..."
delete last phrase in second paragraph, "...as the storm brews."
delete "Lost in thought..." from mid-sentence 3rd pp.
In read and re-reading the paragraphs, your sentences are short and to the point, some of the partial phrases take change the rhythm of your writing (no pun intended).
My two cents.
Looking forward to the next part...
Hmmm, being coy now are you? Great piece!
No this isn't the vampire series. She will marry him and live happily ever after. Won't she?
I enjoy your writing...can't wait for the next installment!
That just wasn't nearly enough! I liked but hated how you left it hanging. :-)
Yes we want more teaser!lol
Nice!! Camp Andrew has been good for you.
Great story...I always enjoy your writing. See now...I believe that every single choice combination is played out...as if life were the ultimate video game and every conceivable choice one makes is a different life-game play to where you've lived every choice possible; either simultaneously or at some point in time.
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