It loomed large
The focal point of the room
Plush and inviting
Silk sheets
Plump pillows
Naked flesh
She sighed
Not content, frustrated
Wondering, yet again, how she got here
Laying in this oasis of luxury
She never felt more lonely...
...while she was not alone.
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This was a Magpie Tale. I don't typically do poetry and I don't do rhyming... So be gentle. ;)
14 comments:
thats ok, my poetry rarely rhymes...smiles.
as far as the story..it is sad...but true of so many...
Brian is right ... poetry doesn't have to rhyme. When words just pour from your heart, all is fine. Your Magpie is well written ... I enjoyed reading it!
I like it. It could relate to many situations .......
impressive poem.
sad and true... how many are lonely without being alone...
Nice Magpie
I like this! There is such truth to it as well.
Bautiful: so sad and so true. :)
I. LOVE. IT!!!!!!!!!!
In fact, I love it so much, I may put it on my blog. So you'll be "published" now... kind of!
Sad to be lonely, when not alone.
Wise words in this piece! It does happen.
When I first learned of all the writing transgressions that e e cummings committed, I never ever worried about my writing again.
As the others have said, you write of a sad situation. I was more alone the last four years I was married than I've ever felt since I've been divorced...
I think one of the biggest differences is not having that person around to continue to berate me... *shrugs*
Great writing, dear...
~shoes~
brian: i've got a long way to go before i can compete with your stuff though.
helen: thanks
kathy: glad you liked it
jingle: hey stranger. thanks for stopping by.
gabriela: too many are lonely when they're not alone...
amy: i guess my attempt at poetry wasn't half bad. i still think i'm better at writing the vampire stories though.
RA: thanks
Ms S: aww, shucks. you know you've made it big when someone plagarizes your stuff ;)
Shoes: thanks for previewing this one and telling me it didn't totally suck :P
Who needs gentle! Not you. This is a tightly written economical masterful poem. However, it might be time for divorce!
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